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Tavish wrote:I've got all sorts of ideas for different porn movies. Does that count?
Amazinz wrote:I share your love but I've never tried my hand at a screenplay. I am an amateur crime noir/science fiction writer. I have used a couple of peer review communities but have had mixed results. However, I recently found URBIS and have been quite active there. It's a great resource if you don't mind reviewing as well as writing. If you decide to join PM me your email address so you can join via invite and I can get free credits.
The Artful Dodger wrote:My professor and my classmates absolutely loved my script though, despite the fact I liberally used every kind of creative obscenity I could think of, but ironically they thought the depth of the characters more than made up for it.
"This script has an interesting PRINCESS BRIDE feel to it once it’s clear what the genre is and what’s happening. Once we get past the opening confusion (see below), the script opens up and flies. The script becomes a real page turner after page 13 and becomes a light and easy read with many clever sequences"
"This script is very well written, formatting, structure and description are all excellent and show that the author has studied writing in this medium. Description is excellent with script propelling action words. The scenes are well paced adhering to the In Late – Out Early school of dramatics screenplay writing."
"Sequence after sequence, this story is Laugh Out Loud funny. "
"All in all, this is an excellent script with significant marketability. I have not see another script like it except for PRINCESS BRIDE and the only similarity there is the storytelling structure of an event presented in the absurd. It is very difficult to come up with something new in Hollywood and this script benefits from being able to say that it’s similar to PRINCESS BRIDE, whish was and still is hugely popular, with a very fresh spin."
"The beginning has a feel like NATIONAL TREASURE with the grandfather and grandson and the disapproving father figure but quickly becomes PRINCESS BRIDE. The problem is that we have a sense of confusion while this becomes clear. The first couple pages really read like a Drama. Confusion right out of the gate is a bad thing, once the reader is confused, it can be very difficult to draw them back in. This script is excellent so the reader does come back around but the situation can be avoided by striving for genre clarity from the very first line."
"By 13 it becomes finally clear what the genre is and what we can expect. The reader settles in to what’s going to be a story reminiscent of something by Mel Brooks and the script becomes an enjoyable romp..."
"I would recommend against the word DOCUMENTARY in the title. Some people will think it’s a documentary if you do and it most certainly isn’t. This script would benefit from a title that’s more of a play on words which would also give the reader a hint of the genre going in."
"Remember to give us character ages when introducing them."
"If this is going to be a comedy, then don’t have the opening scene read like a drama. The scene on the boat is a head scratcher because it seems period except for the language the sailors are using. There has been nothing visually funny except the name of the boat"
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