Well first of all what were the starting positions? Number teams drafting?
Just looking at it looks like you went all out on hitting, and Kinsler in the 13th rd is just a huge steal. Also surprised you got both Pujols and Holliday which Im quite shocked by unless it was an 8 team draft or something.
Your pitching needs lots of work no offense.
With the amount of outfielders you ended up taking, after grabbing Lee, Ordonez and Holliday, instead of going for Young and Ibanez later in the draft you could of took your pitchers there and grabbed some outfield talent just as good as Ibanez and Young in Hamilton and possibly Justin Upton maybe even Bourn/Ellsbury because you need steals.
Overall after taking your top five picks which Im assuming were Pujols, Ordonez, Holliday, Lee and Atkins that would've been enough offense to supplement your team and you could have drafted some pitching. Your also really weak in the stolen base department, you could have waited a couple rounds for shortstop and taken Furcal who should rebound this year.
Your hitting I would agree is great but you might have overdid it, pitching is just as much important and with how weak your pitching is booting steals will hurt but its a mock so you have to take chances.
Just a suggestion: Try taking hitting first five rounds, then pitching becasue there is a lot of good mid round talent in the pitching department and guys like Franceour and Young can be had late to help offenses. If you go for big power hitters like you did early Id suggest grabbing Furcal late or even a bench guy like Bourn or Ellsbury who should steal plenty of bases.
It took me a few mocks to get good balance with hitting and pitching but since its a mock no harm no foul