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Postby dclark0699 » Thu Jun 26, 2008 5:49 pm

Does anyone else play around with screenwriting as a hobby? I just recently finished the second draft of my fourth comedy script - and was just seeing if anyone else shared my strange man-love for the written word.

I have no idea if I will every do anything with them - but thanks to moneys allocated through the economic stimulus plan, I did enter one into the BlueCat screenwriting competition this year - mostly because on top of being entered, they give you several pages of notes and comments. I thought it would be nice to see where I actually stand in terms of whether or not they are any good. I mean, I make myself laugh, but that's not terribly difficult. I could be awful at it and really would have no idea - it will be nice to see what someone outside my immediate family and friends and college screenwriting classmates actually think of one of them.

Any one else?
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Re: Screenwriting?

Postby Tavish » Thu Jun 26, 2008 7:30 pm

I've got all sorts of ideas for different porn movies. Does that count? :)

I used to write play scripts all the time in high school, but a lack of time and dedication when I went to college put an end to that. I still have a couple notebooks from back then with a few plot synopsis(es??). A couple of them makes me remember how stoned I was during high school.
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Re: Screenwriting?

Postby Amazinz » Thu Jun 26, 2008 7:46 pm

I share your love but I've never tried my hand at a screenplay. I am an amateur crime noir/science fiction writer. I have used a couple of peer review communities but have had mixed results. However, I recently found URBIS and have been quite active there. It's a great resource if you don't mind reviewing as well as writing. If you decide to join PM me your email address so you can join via invite and I can get free credits. :-D
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Postby teddy ballgame » Thu Jun 26, 2008 7:53 pm

Me and a few other kids had to write a 15 minute play in German this year. I kind of enjoyed it and the teacher was impressed. There's a website that runs a writing contest for a fake season 5 of LOST and I've thought about writing something for that over the summer just to see how I do.
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Postby The Artful Dodger » Thu Jun 26, 2008 8:14 pm

I took screenwriting as one of my core curriculum classes in college to fulfill my creative arts requirement. I never tried it before that, but I always had an interest in creative writing and wanted to take screenwriting as something different from one of my specialties (short stories). My professor and my classmates absolutely loved my script though, despite the fact I liberally used every kind of creative obscenity I could think of, but ironically they thought the depth of the characters more than made up for it.

I do love writing in general though even though I don't write fiction as a hobby anymore. I wrote a fantasy epic novel in high school, but because I wanted to write 6 or 7 volumes more and with a few life changes (going to college, taking up my career), I've stopped indefinitely. With all the encouragement I get from family, friends, and the feedback of some writers I knew in college, I do want to take it back up again some time down the road.
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Re: Screenwriting?

Postby dclark0699 » Thu Jun 26, 2008 10:16 pm

Tavish wrote:I've got all sorts of ideas for different porn movies. Does that count?


I hear those people make decent money - and on the plus side your dialogue can be horrendous which takes away the hardest part ;-D

Amazinz wrote:I share your love but I've never tried my hand at a screenplay. I am an amateur crime noir/science fiction writer. I have used a couple of peer review communities but have had mixed results. However, I recently found URBIS and have been quite active there. It's a great resource if you don't mind reviewing as well as writing. If you decide to join PM me your email address so you can join via invite and I can get free credits. :-D


I've looked into doing things like that in the past but have never stayed active enough with it to make it worth my while. I guess I don't like the publicness of it, basically anyone can see it and that's never really been my style. It's what keeps me from ever starting a blog.

The Artful Dodger wrote:My professor and my classmates absolutely loved my script though, despite the fact I liberally used every kind of creative obscenity I could think of, but ironically they thought the depth of the characters more than made up for it.


Somehow I am more interested because of the creative obscenities.
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Re: Screenwriting?

Postby Amazinz » Thu Jun 26, 2008 11:05 pm

Peer review services (good ones) are completely private. For instance, your work can't be accessed through Google or Yahoo. And if you set it to private showcase, it's not even regularly available to the community, only when it comes up in a reviewer's queue. You can even take finer control if you wish and dictate exactly who can view. Something to consider at least.
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Re: Screenwriting?

Postby dclark0699 » Sat Jul 12, 2008 8:16 pm

I figured I'd drop in with an update on the contest that I entered. There are thousands of screenplay competitions, but I enter the Blue Cat primarily because they gave coverage on every script - and I have heard many good things about them through other writers and teachers.

Anyone not familiar with the term "coverage" it is just script talk for comments, what I liked, what I didn't like, marketability - that sort of thing.

Two weeks ago, I moved into the Quarterfinals - which out of the 2700 entries was the top like 236 or so - not that big of a deal. The semifinals will cut down to 8-9...the finals down to 4-5....then the winner.

today I got my script coverage back - which basically gives me an idea of where I stand in terms of other spec scripts from probably mostly unproduced writers.

I figured I put some of the comments on here, mostly because I'm excited and want to brag a little :-D . I will only include the comments that don't give away any of what the script is about - because there is no way I can find out who might see them and I'd just like to play the safe side.

"This script has an interesting PRINCESS BRIDE feel to it once it’s clear what the genre is and what’s happening. Once we get past the opening confusion (see below), the script opens up and flies. The script becomes a real page turner after page 13 and becomes a light and easy read with many clever sequences"

"This script is very well written, formatting, structure and description are all excellent and show that the author has studied writing in this medium. Description is excellent with script propelling action words. The scenes are well paced adhering to the In Late – Out Early school of dramatics screenplay writing."

"Sequence after sequence, this story is Laugh Out Loud funny. "

"All in all, this is an excellent script with significant marketability. I have not see another script like it except for PRINCESS BRIDE and the only similarity there is the storytelling structure of an event presented in the absurd. It is very difficult to come up with something new in Hollywood and this script benefits from being able to say that it’s similar to PRINCESS BRIDE, whish was and still is hugely popular, with a very fresh spin."

"The beginning has a feel like NATIONAL TREASURE with the grandfather and grandson and the disapproving father figure but quickly becomes PRINCESS BRIDE. The problem is that we have a sense of confusion while this becomes clear. The first couple pages really read like a Drama. Confusion right out of the gate is a bad thing, once the reader is confused, it can be very difficult to draw them back in. This script is excellent so the reader does come back around but the situation can be avoided by striving for genre clarity from the very first line."

"By 13 it becomes finally clear what the genre is and what we can expect. The reader settles in to what’s going to be a story reminiscent of something by Mel Brooks and the script becomes an enjoyable romp..."

"I would recommend against the word DOCUMENTARY in the title. Some people will think it’s a documentary if you do and it most certainly isn’t. This script would benefit from a title that’s more of a play on words which would also give the reader a hint of the genre going in."

"Remember to give us character ages when introducing them."

"If this is going to be a comedy, then don’t have the opening scene read like a drama. The scene on the boat is a head scratcher because it seems period except for the language the sailors are using. There has been nothing visually funny except the name of the boat"



So far so good. I think I have a good shot to move on to the next round and we'll see where it goes from there. Semi-finalists are announced the first on the month, so I'll probably be back with an update (either positive or negative) at that time.
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Re: Screenwriting?

Postby Amazinz » Sat Jul 12, 2008 8:39 pm

Congrats and good luck. ;-D
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Re: Screenwriting?

Postby IllinoisBandit » Sat Jul 12, 2008 10:08 pm

No joke; that's pretty darn cool. At worst you've surely got a great deal of personal satisfaction for your efforts.
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